hey guys i just wanted an opinion on this novel im writeing

It takes place in a sci-fi inverse where everyone has abilities and if you aren't either in military or working to help troops you were on the run to join the rebellian I haven't wrote anything yet I'm just wondering right now if this is a good topic if anyone is on and looks at this plz leave a reply telling me wether you think it's a good topic or not

 

Doesn't sound like a bad idea. Go ahead and try it out, worst case scenario you'll get bored of it or want to change it.

 

Thanx nejat I'll start working on it just something I've been wanting to do and haven't worked up the cottage to I'll post my progress at least once a week on here if not more

 

That's...not a whole lot to go on, to be honest. Try coming up with some more ideas for your novel to give it more of an identity. Start asking questions about your own world, brainstorm for a while and bring out some details and backstory to beef up the lore a little bit. Start with some of the obvious questions.

Everyone is drafted into the military or they work to support the military in some way, right? So, is this world some kind of futuristic socialist society? Maybe it's a dictatorship, or even an empire that's been in power for generations.

That leads right into another question. How long has this totalitarian authority been in power? Have there been previous rebellions that have tried and failed to overthrow the government?

Speaking of the government, who runs it? Maybe it's a single person, an emperor like we mentioned before, or maybe it's ruled from the shadows by a secret organization of faceless men in business suits who always talk through a voice filter. Or it could always be some kind of robot overlords.

Basically, what I'm saying is, build up your world a little bit. You don't need to write half a novel just to come up with the premise, just come up with a few more ideas. Give your novel an identity.

That's my two cents, hope it helps.

 

It does thank you I'm still a little new to this and am trying to get used to it

 

Here is the teaser for it plz let me know what you think

In a world that is torn by war a single force appears when there seems to be no hope and unites all of humanity. The only catch is they kill off those who disagree with their terms such is either you use your ability for the military in case a threat shows up or you work in a factory to benefit the military. Ten years latter a group of people managed to escape and form a secret community called the resistance for any ability wielded that didn't agree with the power at hand. Soon they got thousands upon thousands of people signing up so much so they had to make a school that was bassicly an entrance exam to the resistance fighters. If you didn't pass finals you were helping the fighters by making them gear and being there for them. One day someone passed the finals useing not one but three abilities. His name was Shunsawa he deflected the training bullets the teachers used and threw them back them he also used pyrokynesis and finally he could walk through walls at will. The leader of the resistance took interest especially since his ability was to take another's if he had to. The two then became friends and from that point on had worked together.

 

Now here I got a little caught up so here chapter one has already been complete and the main character of the novel shino is about to run into his first encounter outside the walls I don't know if I sell it to much and make him seem too over powered I'm basing this off of a balanced system that has cons along with the pros of each ability.

Spoiler: problem child

"finally I'm out of that he'll hole of a city." Just as shino said this he noticed something moving in the distance. "Damnit and I don't have any weapons besides summon." Just then the figure in the distance charged he summon a wall to stop it when that didn't work he summoned his familiar archer. "Archer I need you to get me out of here but don't go back to the city I'm leaving that wretched place." Archer leaped into the air and took shino to safety. "What do you wish me to do about that foul beast master." Archer asking this puzzled shino he's never asked that about an enemy before. "Take it out can't have it tailing me all the way to the resistance if it does they're all royally fucked especially the academy students." Archer then went back towards the creature still unknown in origin when he arrived he pulled out his two blades. "A bow would be ideal for this but I see no good vantage points well I guess I'll just have to do this then." The beast roared loudly and charged at archer archer dodged the attack and struck it with his blades. But it doesn't seem to have an effect he kept repeating this action then he saw it. The creatures weak point. "I'll wait for it to charge at me again and then I'll strike it there in its chest." Sure enough the beast charged archer slid under it and nailed it right in the center of its chest. The beast toppled over dead archer went back t o shino. "The deed is done master now if you excuse me I'll have to rest awhile before I can fight again can you manage." "Yes I'll manage archer thank you for your help go now and rest I'll call on you again when the time comes be ready to fight." "Yes master shino." And with that our hero survived yet another trial and is well on their way to joining the resistance.

shines ability is summon I explain that in the first chapter if wanted I will post that so you know what's happening and why shino left the city to join the resistance.

 

This really needs a lot of work especially when it comes to the dialogue between the characters.

This was really confusing also.